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Strider612 Junior Member
since 2003-12-21
Posts 46Alabama, United States of America |
Is anything I do Ever good enough for you? You call me "friend" one day But the next push me away. I'm hanging by a strand, And I want to understand. How can I know the problems If you never say what's wrong? How do I know you're happy If I never hear your song? Why do I keep on saying All the things I've said before? Maybe you never answered me And maybe I want more. You've made me feel so worthless, And our friendship is impaired. And I can never tell you-- For my heart is simply scared. You know I want to find Everything that’s in your mind. Every time you sigh, I have to wonder why. And then you don’t want me, And the cause I cannot see. How can I learn your worries If you never let me know? How do I keep your secrets If you’re afraid to show? Why would I keep on asking If you’d let me see inside? What’s dwelling in your conscience? Do you really have to hide? Don’t you know that I have loved you? Can’t you see how much I cared? How I wish that I could know you! But my heart is truly scared. If something in your life Is causing you much strife Or giving you much grief, I want to send relief. With your heart I’ll walk If you’ll open up and talk. How can I bear your burdens If you won’t share your loads? How can I follow after you If you disguise your roads? Why would I keep on searching If I had found my prize? Why can you not simply be Transparent in my eyes? I wish that I could tell you-- That’s much more than I have dared-- But in your eyes I’m worthless, And my heart is only scared. How would I rejoice with you If I don’t know you’re glad? How am I to cheer you up If you don’t say you’re sad? You know I’d like to sing with you Or help you face your fears. You know I’d like to laugh with you Or wipe away your tears. So I’ll try to think back fondly on Some good times that we shared. And you’ll never hear me speak a word. This heart of mine’s too scared. Let me know what y'all think. Grace and peace. |
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Vixen28 Junior Member
since 2003-12-19
Posts 13wise,va |
I loved the poem . And i loved the concept. I think you are a great writer |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Loved it. It was beautiful! Very awesome write. ~Kissa  I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
That was very nice! I liked it a lot. It made me think of some people I know and how I feel about them. Do you write song lyrics? This sounded like a song. Very well done! Hope to see more from you soon.  ~sky Hold on, if you feel like letting go |
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Strider612 Junior Member
since 2003-12-21
Posts 46Alabama, United States of America |
Well, I do occasionally write songs, but that doesn't really happen to be a true song. I often like to write in a verse-chorus-verse-chorus format, though. It could make a lot of poems convertible into songs without much difficulty, I suppose. I like repetition in a lot of poems, so that you have a strong central idea that you keep coming back to. I like to emphasize the feelings as much as I can, although maybe sometimes I go too far. Anyway, thanks for the feedback. |
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