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Teen Poetry #7

Rumor

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

0 posted 2004-02-19 02:45 PM

She listens to the gossip.
About her no doubt.
She drifts off into her own little world,
not caring or paying attention to the stares,
or the whispers.
She doesnt care anymore,
It is just another day,
just another nightmare,
just another rumor added to the rumor mill.
Her only friend is the darkness.
the only place she belongs.
The only place that accepts her.
the only place she isnt alone.

~Vampire kisses :evil

This one is short, but i like it.

[This message has been edited by kissa~rachelle (02-20-2004 12:20 AM).]

Ixxi
Member

since 2004-01-02

Posts 77
England

1 posted 2004-02-19 03:26 PM

I really, really enjoyed this. It's really, I dunno, atmospheric in a cool way.

dodge_chick2003
Member

since 2004-01-18

Posts 136
California

2 posted 2004-08-04 02:46 PM

Most people wont understand this But I do, I have been there plenty of times. I just hope that you know you arnt alone. If you need someone to talk to I'm here my addy is lexy_lou387@yaoo.com. Keep up the good work.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

3 posted 2004-08-04 10:33 PM

This is expressed very well.
And I know the feeling.
needing to hide in the darkness.

The only part I would suggest changing is this line:
just another rumor added to the rumor mill.
Just because it is redundant. maybe change rumor, to a different word, the first time you use it.
But I think I'm just nit picking, cause I can't find anything I dislike that much.

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