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SimpleDiscourse
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0 posted 2004-02-18 10:31 PM



the city eats
him alive
when the countryside
unfurls its
miles upon miles
onto him
and he falls
for the girl
with a song worthy name
she wishes she were
a work of fiction
and he is willing
to turn to the pages
for her
the last sentence
of
her final chapter
is read aloud
"when the sun
explodes
all over my sky,
only then
will i become
your destination."

© Copyright 2004 Erin Reynolds - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-02-18 10:34 PM


Hmm... I dont really know what to think. I like that about poems. They make ya think outside the box, a place i have become familiar with. Nice write.
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2 posted 2004-02-19 01:48 AM


sigh...I know the feeling, I'm such a cry baby when it comes to any sweet sad endings. This was very touching and very...whats the word...bittersweet? sounds good! I really enjoyed it.
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Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

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3 posted 2004-02-19 09:55 AM


once again, very nice
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4 posted 2004-02-19 10:19 AM


Erin~

'he falls
for the girl
with a song worthy name'


Oh what a lovely thought~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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