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Teen Poetry #7

Just being me.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

0 posted 2004-02-18 09:42 PM

I sit in my room,
feeling so alone.
Casted out,
cuz i'm not another clone.

I tried being the same,
as all of the popular ones.
I hated being so fake,
it drove me insane.

I couldnt keep acting,
It just wasnt right.
I wasnt meant to be cooped up,
I'm a creature of the night.

Why cant all of them see?
I am just being me.

~Vampire kisses

I dont like this one all that much, i thoguht i would post it to get some advice on how to make it better.
Oh, and ignore the first two comments. I reposted this.

[This message has been edited by kissa~rachelle (02-20-2004 12:27 AM).]

Manth88
Junior Member

since 2003-06-15

Posts 45
IL, USA

1 posted 2004-02-18 10:36 PM

Wow this is really deep!! But I like alot, you definatly got the point across. Nice write.

*^!Manth88!^*

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

2 posted 2004-02-18 10:42 PM

Thanks. I've been workng a lot on my imagery, and havent really been so worried about rhyming.
~Vampire Kisses

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

skyshine

Member Elite

since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

3 posted 2004-02-21 11:46 PM

Hey, sometimes it takes courage to be what you want and not what everyone else wants. You go girl! Well done!

~sky

Hold on, if you feel like letting go
Hold on, it gets better than you know....
~Good Charlotte

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