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watching the rain |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain 
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v.1 it feels like i'm dying when i look in the mirror and in my eyes you can see i'm wishing i wasn't here because i can't take this kind of pain everyday.. and i've tried everything i can to stay.. chorus but that look in your eyes i'll never forget maybe one day i won't regret everything i have ever done.. and maybe one day i'll have won... but until that time i'm still here alone watching the rain through the window... v.2 i'll hold my head up and try not to cry even though i feel like dying the tears will come but only late at night.. and when i see the broken glass i won't give a fight hook i'm sick of being here and trying to please everyone i cannot be me so i have to i'm leaving everything.... and running into the rain (chorus) end one day.....one day...you'll understand...why i was watching the rain....... i'm sitting in the dark....waiting... waiting for you to see me. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
VERY moving piece riley. I'm liking this a lot. I can relate So much...sigh. |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I'm watching the rain too....that was beautiful.  ~sky Hold on, if you feel like letting go |
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OtherSideOfTheMirror Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 245 |
I can relate to this. Thanks, Riley. -cassiopeia |
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Ixxi Member
since 2004-01-02
Posts 77England |
I read these lyrics earlier on today, but I didn't get the chance to make a comment as I had to go out. But the words have really stuck in my head all day. This would definitely make an exceptionally good, cool, original song. I only wish I could write such good lyrics.. Well done. I loved this, and I don't feel that way about many pieces of writing on here. |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Lexy-thank you for replying and sadly...i think a lot of people can relate to this....thanks again. skyshine-the rain is by far my favorite element of nature and capturing its beauty is difficult...i am so glad you enjoyed. OtherSideOfTheMirror-thanks for replying and i'm glad you can relate. Ixxi-i am stunned at your reply to say the least....thank you so much for saying that....i am so glad you liked it! thanks for reading everyone! -ri- i'm sitting in the dark....waiting... |
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Snickers123 Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 94United States-Iowa |
beautiful, I loved it!! |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Very moving, I often turn to the rain myself when going through troubled times so this piece hit very close to home, beautifully written. ~Live and Laugh~ Don't look to me for perfection for I will surely let you down. |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
I love the rain and used to watch it through the window of my grandparent's house when I was little, so I can totally relate to this! Once again, great write! * For all the words of tongue and pen, the saddest are those, "It might have been." * |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
The rain...a beautiful subject, that can mean almost anything you want it to. I loved reading this. It was a very emotional peice, and i loved the way i could hear the music, and the song in my head... Amazing write. Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow! I can't believe I missed this.  GREAT WRITE!!!  Merry Christmas!  ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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