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the_fortress
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since 2003-12-31
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0 posted 2004-02-08 09:14 PM



Lost in relationships
Friendship died in vain
When my world is crashing
I tend to go insane

In my room at night
My mind just isn’t clear
My head is spinning wildly
I don’t sleep a wink

I know your in your room also
With your walkman blasting
Trying to drown the problems away
New problems always arise

I look at those lonely stars
Tonight they shine bright
Maybe your staring at them also
Wishing of being away

As our imagination runs wild
We think more pleasant thoughts
Escaping from the reality
Climbing the mountain of enless thought



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Savage Quiescence
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since 2002-07-29
Posts 326
Wandering
1 posted 2004-02-09 04:01 PM


Pretty sad write, here. It is a good piece, though. There are a few places I would suggest working on, but it seems like this one is meant to be more raw. *Shrugs* Thanks for sharing.

"Be the Change you wish to see in the world" -Ghandi

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