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SimpleDiscourse
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since 2003-04-24
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0 posted 2004-02-08 09:05 PM



Shadows cast by trees
Onto cold winter pavement
If only our destination weren't so dismal
Across the bridge
The bay is covered in ice
I take a few pictures
Though I know they will only
Turn out blurred from the speed of the car
Music plays quietly
So as not to wake our sleeping passenger
If only the road weren't so loud
Shadows cast by trees
Onto cold winter pavement
If only our destination weren't so dismal.

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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
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1 posted 2004-02-08 09:24 PM


good. Really good. I like the part about the pictures not comming out because of the speed of the car. This was very real. I liked it.
~Lex

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