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Riley
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in the pouring rain

0 posted 2004-02-06 04:27 PM


verse one
Bet you’ve been waiting for a girl like me
the punk chick watchin mtv
who can't make up her mind....
every single time your around

yeah right

chorus
i'm the girl you look right by
and please don't pretend you don't
cause i'm watchin you out the corner of my eye
trying not to
but what i feel is beyond my control
i'm just sitting here wishing you felt it too

verse two
so there's everything sitting in front of you
it's like you've got it all
but there's something in your eyes telling me
somethings....wrong

hook
oohh....and you wouldn't tell me
because i can't get to you
i've been trying forever
there's nothing left that i can do

'cept

chorus
sit here and watch you out the corner of my eye
tryin not to, but i can't help what i do....
what i'm feeling is beyond my control now
i'm sitting here wishin
you would feel it too

hook
there's something in me telling me
this is real
believe me, i'm out of control.....ohhh
and i can't help what i feel

but you'll never notice because....

chorus
i'm the girl you look right by
and please don't pretend you don't
cause i'm watchin you out the corner of my eye
trying not to
but i can't make up my mind...

(not sure what to think about this....give me your thoughts)





i'm sitting in the dark....waiting...
waiting for you to see me.

© Copyright 2004 Riley Grant - All Rights Reserved
WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
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...Coming to
1 posted 2004-02-06 04:42 PM


I really like this song, it's well put together. Im sure alot of people can relate to it also. The chorus is really good.
Great job, I hope to hear it on the radio someday.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
2 posted 2004-02-06 09:20 PM


I liked this, it was great. I just wish I could hear how it goes.
~Lex

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