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SimpleDiscourse
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since 2003-04-24
Posts 79


0 posted 2004-02-04 08:15 PM



Welcome to the
   Age of communication...

My mind on water towns:
  I hope you find me
Necessary
         someday.

And a deaf man
Takes a lover
  without hands.
without lips.

(Two problems have arisen
  with this poorly
planned love affair.)

Welcome to the
   Age of communication...


[just a note that this whole thing was completely random and i was basically just throwing a few ideas i had together.]

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peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
1 posted 2004-02-04 09:44 PM


This was an interesting piece. The third stanza really stood out to me. If you expanded this a little bit more, I think this would be an awesome write...but that is just my personal opinion! ~Jess

"Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse

drummerboy678
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since 2003-10-28
Posts 134

2 posted 2004-02-04 11:25 PM


Wow, I really like this one.  Interesting idea, but real well written.  
Nice job!

Essential Distress
Junior Member
since 2004-01-22
Posts 33

3 posted 2004-02-05 06:33 AM


impressive.

experimentation is the only way to grow as a poet. i like the way you have chosen to express yourself here. nicely done.

perhaps extend it if you have the energy, however its lovely as it is

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
4 posted 2004-02-06 10:08 PM


I agree, experiment is the way of the writer, and this, this is a great success.
Nice.

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