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Paragon
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since 2003-02-16
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0 posted 2004-02-03 06:02 PM



So many tears I never cried So many times I hid inside
remembering all those lies, feeling so falsified
so many words spoken in which you implied
meanings that weren't there and I didnt care
because I was too wrapped up in the moment

So many times I tried, only to be swept aside
remembering all the ties that now lie severed
all the times you swore we'd always be together
I guess this is that phenoma called "forever"
this loss of trust, this negation of positive sensation
this endless mind-numbing desperation

So many times I doubted self and self doubted me
lookin' back at times when I used to look and act
in a manner or fashion that just couldn't be
even at times when I tried so hard I just seemed to lack
originality, I couldnt see it was blatant fallacy...
So many times I've tried to break away from this
but eventually the voice inside lures me back
back to this dynamic compromise comprised
of hidden truths, blatant lies, false apologies
defiling my innocence to fit in, don't act so surprised

So many times I've found myself alone in a crowded room
revelation lying therein shattered realities become truth
I've lost sight of whats worth fighting for, hope I find it soon
So many times I've thought this is it, the end, but Im proof
that somewhere out there is a purpose beyond finding my tomb...


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Snickers123
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since 2004-05-07
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1 posted 2004-07-07 05:54 PM


it was pretty good, im not sure about the last line though, but i dont know, maybe i just confused myself, but keep writing.

~*.:Leah:.*~

*Alli4000*
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2 posted 2004-07-07 07:59 PM


hm....i enjoyed this poem as well, but in some parts it seemed to lose it's flow.  Just keep writing and you poetry will improve!

~Alli~

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