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SixtiesChick03
Junior Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 49
NV

0 posted 2004-02-02 06:03 PM



You say that nobody listens,
you tell me that nobody cares.
Open your eyes, because I do.

Are you so far gone that you cant see this?
That I would do anything to see you happy.
I'll listen. I care.

You walk away without a word,
and leave me to wonder what's wrong.
You aren't alone.

I try to make you smile,
but you want no part of me.
Who is the one that doesn't care?

You push me away and hurt me
for reasons I dont understand.
Who is the one that gave up?

Stop saying nobody cares,
dont say that nobody listens.
You dont talk, you dont share.

Go ahead and push me out,
make me into just a wrapper.
That will be your loss.

You aren't alone, you never have been.
I've always been right here if you need me.
Dont just overlook it.

Dont be alone when you dont have to.
Dont hurt yourself when you shouldn't.
Let me listen...let me care.

© Copyright 2004 Sharlene - All Rights Reserved
Kristabell
Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678
Portland, OR
1 posted 2004-02-02 06:53 PM


Good write, and it makes sence. Great job!
Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
2 posted 2004-02-02 09:19 PM


Sometimes you have to talk first in order to let someone in extreme emotional pain open up. I've been in both situations. The one who needs to talk. And the one that wants to hear. You need to be a little more open hearted and try different approaches if this a true story. If not, never mind.
Good expression though.

" If you never stop when you wave goodbye, you just might find if you give it time you will wave hello again."

yankees01rugby
Junior Member
since 2003-08-13
Posts 48
USA
3 posted 2004-02-06 01:07 PM


i wish i had smeone that would say that to me. i know i dont open up to alot of people but maybe if they started the talking first so i knew they really cared i would let them know how i was. so if this is about you and want someone to open up to you, try talking to them first. just a thought

Does the term "cruel and unusual punishment" mean anything to you?

WinterWren
Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
4 posted 2004-02-06 04:44 PM


I really like this one, the emotions are very strong. I couldn't find anything that I would change about it.
Thanks for sharing.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

PoeTik JusTice
Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186
California, USA
5 posted 2004-02-06 06:08 PM


Good write, I really enjoyed it! Keep it up!

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
     *~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

chicken
Junior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 44

6 posted 2004-02-15 01:25 PM


wow
blueyedlioness
Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289
USA
7 posted 2004-02-15 03:40 PM


I wish I didn't know how you're feeling.

Once upon a time, I was the one person in the world he DIDN'T want to care.

You can't help people like that... not until they want you to.


brezee
Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140

8 posted 2004-02-16 09:37 PM


that's so true...i know many people that do that...they should read this...great write!


~*brezee*~

Strider612
Junior Member
since 2003-12-21
Posts 46
Alabama, United States of America
9 posted 2004-02-16 10:30 PM


That was really good.  I know kind of how that feels, although not to that extent.  It was full of emotion and well written.  Keep up the good work.
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