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Below the ground
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Below the ground |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I'm your passenger on this cold ride toward the middle of the ground. We watch the roots of flowers twitch in their confinement. Share a curious smirk. Swallow down thick spoon-fulls of sap dripping in, attempting to fossilze us. I'm your passenger, your willing prisoner. on this ride to where the rain water works its music. Roll the window down, let the green glittery water fill our lungs. When we awake, we'll be faries. |
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ascending_ecstasy Member
since 2004-01-21
Posts 102 |
i took a liking to that but i think its got a bit too much structure... |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
structure? In what way? When I write, I never write with intent. I just write. But, eleborate on what your idea of "structure" is, and how I could work on this. Thank you. ~Lex |
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