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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2004-01-26 07:53 PM


Smells of smoke, and you love it
her cold hands in yours, and you
without your courage.
Smirk at you, you stare and she
laughs in your ear, muttering
something about soft.
A bit of serious in the way
she looks at you, charcoal
in her eyes and it's grainy.

But you can tell, she'll hold
onto everything for as long
as she possibly can.

Giggling, and movie viewing
popcorn in a paper cup
she's licking your finger again.
Doesn't like, much of
anything, now that you think
you must be pretty special.
And it's almost, almost hilarity
consider it an honor to love
someone as much as she does you.


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1 posted 2004-01-27 01:03 PM


That was really powerful, Allysa....

~sky

Hold on, if you feel like letting go
Hold on, it gets better than you know....
~Good Charlotte

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2 posted 2004-01-27 02:04 PM


Ah but that male ego sure holds a lot doesn't it?  Nicely done Allysa.

         
~ Blessed Be ~

Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
3 posted 2004-01-29 12:40 PM


Thanks for the comments, guys.  

Yeah, ain't it lovely?

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