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RedDiamond1307
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since 2004-01-05
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0 posted 2004-01-25 11:59 AM



I think of all my wicked problems,
I think of all my wounded pain.
I think of all my bittersweet sorrows,
untill I go tragically insane.

I think of all the artificial smiles I've worn,
Which hide bittersweet sorrows underneath.
No one seems to notice,
That I go through so much brutal grief.

My black tears seem to keep flowing,
Inside my tired blue/grey eyes.
Each time I want to tell you,
my words come out as dissembling lies.

These days I'm feeling distant,
Far away and cruelie weak.
My blistering sadness pulls me further,
from the golden happiness I seek.

I've begun to strangly realize,
that my high hopes and longing dreams are gone.
I'm slowly walking down a dead-end road,
humming a sad, tuneless song.

I'm standing a brick rooftop,
altough I'm terrified of heights,
I'm watching the tiny cars beneath me move,
And somehow this doesn't feel right.

Now I think of what I doing,
I know should I find a harder way,
to beat through my burning depression,
Will I be able to someday?

Someone might be there,
To help me make it all the way through.
Maybe they will sit and listen,
And tell me what to do.

I'm seeing through the black darkness,
And I'm starting to trust a few,
I think I'll try to make it,
So I can be there for them, too.

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Michelle_loves_Mike
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1 posted 2004-01-25 02:22 PM


Very well written,,,and such a true look at life,,,,if we can fight our way thru,,we can always help others,,Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
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2 posted 2004-01-25 05:29 PM


Very excellent poem, you expressed your emotions perfectly. I really love the lines, "I think of all the artificial smiles I've worn, which hide bittersweet sorrows underneath." I love this poem.
Thank you for sharing, this is going in my library.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
3 posted 2004-01-26 05:09 PM


Wow. I really like this. I have definitely felt this way before, and to tell you the truth, it is a scary feeling, and i hate it when i get that way. I hope to hear more!
~kissa~

**~kissa~**
*I wanna be a little more like me, and a little less like YOU!*~ Linkin Park

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