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ascending_ecstasy
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0 posted 2004-01-22 10:54 PM



The night of previous....

Twisting problems
Ascending below
Heading for the sun

Drink the essence
Essence of the sole
Let it leave
Like spirit

Spirit of the sole
Connected by essence
Descending above
Away from the moon

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Essential Distress
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1 posted 2004-01-22 10:58 PM


i think you need to let go of structure....


hahaaaaa

nah its good. pretty short though. whats the deal there?

ascending_ecstasy
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2 posted 2004-01-22 11:00 PM


hahaha!!! lol....

this was written BEFORE i learnt of structure.

i dunno why it's short... there wasnt much else to write. my trip to the moon was short i guess eh? lol...

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