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Ixxi
Member

since 2004-01-02

Posts 77
England

0 posted 2004-01-18 01:47 PM

Hunger

This would have been one person’s thoughts.
Except
They were too downtrodden by their surroundings to express themselves.
With one breath
To inhale the numbness of apathy.
The countless, unknown, unaware different families battle with their ways of discipline and upbringing -
Some with which influence their oh so precious child to inherit the contagious curse Of becoming forever
Hungry for attention and recognition.
Uttering words of wisdom in their minds, or of pro-porn, anti-textbook gags.
The exterior hardens and pain receptors do not function or respond.
The mind and personality becomes wrapped up in its own stupid self~adoration,
Its insecurity, its need for normality, to be accepted in society ~
But all in vain. It falls underneath itself,
To become fresh filth in the sea of problem children,
To become the sum of infinity recurring, to become numb to themselves.
The once weak will take control
After their bleak blanket of suffering.

I.
Cry.
I.
Am.
One.
Human.
With.
Emotional.
Strength.
My.
Life.
Is.
Not.
Your.
Joke.

Match
Member

since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

1 posted 2004-01-18 03:08 PM

I like it..

The way it flows I thought was a little difficult for me to follow at first. But I like the way you have it laid out and the end lines are good "my life is not your joke"
good write

-ash

sweet_lost_palestinian1
Member

since 2004-01-08

Posts 90

2 posted 2004-01-18 10:46 PM

hello first of all..ur poem is reallly nice and very touchable to any-1s heart..but my sister u have to know life is not only tears and ears and heartbroken ...remember u are here to be tested ...Dont make people tell u what u want because u knopw urself more than people know u...just goive it a try and just try living in life like its living with u now...and remember there got to be atleast 1 person who will alwayz love u and stand up for u ,...just remember that ,that person will never judge u in any way or hate u in any way..just follow ur dreams and u willl successed....mayy god bless u ..

Ixxi
Member

since 2004-01-02

Posts 77
England

3 posted 2004-02-04 11:41 AM

That's not really what the poem is about...
But I guess that's for you to interpret, so thanks anyway for the advice. x

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