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Teen Poetry #7

beauty

sweet_lost_palestinian1
Member

since 2004-01-08

Posts 90

0 posted 2004-01-15 10:30 PM

Beauty is seen.
in the sunlight
the tree,the birds
corn growing ,and people working,.
or dancing of there harvest,

beauty is heard
In the night
wind sighing,rain falling
or singer chanting
anything in birdnest,

beauty in yourself
good deeds,happy thoughts
that i repeat themselves
in your dreams
in your work.
and even in your rest..

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

1 posted 2004-01-15 10:52 PM

this is beautiful....

~*~
In your light I learn how to love
In your beauty how to make poems
You dance inside my chest where
no one sees you and that sight becomes art

Michelle_loves_Mike

Senior Member

since 2003-12-20

Posts 1189
Pennsylvania

2 posted 2004-01-15 11:29 PM

Very beautifly done sweet,,,,,
You show true ability,
thank you for slowing down and putting your thoughts in order
Good Job
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

sweet_lost_palestinian1
Member

since 2004-01-08

Posts 90

3 posted 2004-01-15 11:36 PM

THANK U MY DEAR SISTERS..

drummerboy678
Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 134

4 posted 2004-01-16 12:39 PM

I know I was harsh on you before, but I'm glad to see you write a poem like this. This one (although has a few flaws that I don't know if you want me to criticize, or leave as is) shows a lot of effort, thought, organization, and lowercase letters.

I like it. Nicely done.

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