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an Unclear Life
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an Unclear Life |
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pammy Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 50California |
An Unclear Life Like ebony, this life is unclear, On the outside it shines like a star in the sky, But below the gleam, there lies black. Like taking a walk on a circular path, Nothing seems to change. After going in circles and around and around, Everything seems the same. Like a song you can’t stand being played over again, My head hurts with a hunger for something new. An incipient anger, clenched fists, And eyes filled with tears, because no one seems to care Pounding feet and the sound of a miserable scream, I run from this place in a small mountain town, With streets so bare and empty. It holds the familiar faces and the words that have stung so bad. I need to get out and get to a place, Where things will certainly change. Where people try to give back what they get, And no fake shimmer is needed. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
The problem with that is there is no such place. It's gonna happen wherever you go. There just seems to be more around cause your in that small mountain town and around the same people ALL the time. The people need to change, not the scenery. Poem was good. Watch for using the repetitons, "like" in the beginning of the sentences. One day you'll learn you can't hate the NFC "Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur |
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