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sweet_lost_palestinian1
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since 2004-01-08
Posts 90


0 posted 2004-01-13 06:51 PM



MY LOVE WHEN YOUR AWAY.I MISS YOUR LITTLE TOUCH.
.WITHOUT FEEELING THAT IM ALIVE.
.
.CLOSE YOUR EYES AND GIVE ME YOUR HANDS.
.AND WHEN I FIRST THINK OF YOU,YOU WILL FEEL MY TOUCH..
MY LOVE WHEN YOUR AWAY

.

.I MISS YOUR TOUCH WHEN I FIRST THINK OF YOU WILL FEEEL MY HANDS COMING OVER YOUR HEART..
.YOU WILLL TELL YOUR SELF YES..
.AND IT WILL BE LIKE 1 ..
.I KNOW U AND I FEEL YOU AND I SEE YOUR EYES FASING MINE..ITS LIKE IM BETWEEN YOUR ARMS AND I FEEL MY CLOCK IS RUNNING SOO FAST THAT I CANT SAY GOOD BYE ,I FEEL U AND I NEED YOU.
..
MY LOVE WHEN YOUR AWAY.
..I MISS YOUR TOUCH ,WHEN I FIRST THINK OF YOU,YOU WILL FEEEL MY HANDS COMING OVER YOUR HEART.
..YOU WILLL TELL YOUR SELF YES...AND IT WILL BE LIKE 1 .
....
.EVEN IF EACH HEART IS IN A PLACE AND WE HAVE A PLACE THAT WE WILL ALWAYZ MEET EVEN IF WE ARE THROUGH..

.IT WILL ALWAYZ MAKE USE FEEL LIKE WE ARE 1.. NOTHING COULD TAKE US AWAY FROM EACH OTHER NOT,,GENERATIONS
, NOT EVEN FORGETING WE ARE 1 NOT EVEN GETTING AFRAID TO DIE .. OR EVEN IF U WERE FORGETTING U WE ARE 1..
..[YOU WILL TELL YOUR SELF YES AND I WILL TELL MY SELF YES AND IT WILL BE HEARD LIKE 1..
DONT CRY ..DONT CRY..
.ME AND U ARE NOW 1..

MY LOVE.,,
MY LOVE ,,
, WE HAVE PROMISES TOCOMPLETE NO MATTER HOW FAR WE GO,,, THE FIRST THING THAT WE WILL FIRST WISH IS FOR ME AND U TO BE ONE..
MY LOVE,, MY LOVE
,, MY HEART WILL PORTACT YOU LIKE THE TEAR I PORTACTED.
.MY LOVE MY LOVE

MY LOVEEEEEEEEEEEEE

MY LOVE WHEN YOUR AWAY.
..I MISS YOUR TOUCH WHEN I FIRST THINK OF YOU WILL FEEEL MY HANDS COMING OVER YOUR HEART..
.YOU WILLL TELL YOUR SELF YES...AND IT WILL BEHEARD LIKE 1 ...
..

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drummerboy678
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since 2003-10-28
Posts 134

1 posted 2004-01-13 07:58 PM


First of all, I dont think posting your poem (if thats what you can call this) 4 times will get you any more responses.

Second, I'm not really going to take any poem seriously when you use words like FASING, SOOO, 1, and PORTACTED.  

Third, there is a button right under the "tab", above the "shift" called CAPSLOCK.  Turn that off.

Anyways, just follow those three easy steps, and maybe, just maybe, you will get a response.


sweet_lost_palestinian1
Member
since 2004-01-08
Posts 90

2 posted 2004-01-13 08:02 PM


hi first of all....
first--people told me they want to read it ..and second i was posting it but i thought it did not work and third plzz atleast show some  respect...

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Member Rara Avis
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In Your Poetic Mind
3 posted 2004-01-13 08:21 PM


at least two moderators have emailed you could you please respond to one of us, and let us know you have gotten those emails..and reviewd the guidlines in which you agreed when you joined us.....

~*~
In your light I learn how to love
In your beauty how to make poems
You dance inside my chest where
no one sees you and that sight becomes art

drummerboy678
Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 134

4 posted 2004-01-13 08:24 PM


Ok, sorry if I was rude.  

It was a good write.  I enjoyed it.  Keep writing!  Hugssss!!!



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