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akforty7
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since 2004-01-10
Posts 18


0 posted 2004-01-12 11:56 PM


A tear rolls down
The young man's cheek.
He never really thought,
He'd be that weak.

Does she know what she does,
When he tries to show his care?
The way she acts
It's like he's not even there.

He tries to cheer her up,
In hopes that she would smile.
But he seems to be ignored,
For the whole long while.

She knows not what she's doing,
Nor the pain in his chest.
But the young man sucks it up,
And just pledges her his best.

Other people have told him,
The things that they do see.
For the woman is you,
And that young man is me.

But despite all the pain and fear,
I give you my heart.
I'll be here for you forever,
You see, I've cared right from the start.

© Copyright 2004 akforty7 - All Rights Reserved
sweet_lost_palestinian1
Member
since 2004-01-08
Posts 90

1 posted 2004-01-12 11:59 PM


really really gooo keep it upppppppppppp.....
duncan idaho
Member
since 2003-11-14
Posts 70
dune
2 posted 2004-01-15 07:14 PM


reeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee uuuuuu raeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
screeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeech
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEErrrrrrrrrrrueeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeek

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