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iwontdrownagain
Junior Member
since 2003-10-04
Posts 39
Massachusetts

0 posted 2004-01-12 05:01 PM


Here's one I wrote about the stupid people that are in my school. I got irritated and I needed to write...

Is it normal to feel this alone
When people you think are friends sit behind you
And talk and ignore you?
Is it a common problem for some to feel betrayed
When all that was said was a lie or three?
Is it my place to expose what really happened in the room
Behind the door of the cottage?
I'm never sure anymore, but don't you wish you were 5 again?
When you were younger.
And nobody thought of hurting anyone else.
You weren't worried about your friends talking behind your back.
I didn't even know what that was.
But I do now, and it's no foursquare.
People judge people because of the smallest things.
At age 5, you all listen to the same Barney or Muppet Babies theme song.
Who doesn't want to do that?
You can all at least sit in a room without yelling or screaming
At each other.
But here we are, high school seniors who can't act their age.
We can't have this or do that because we don't act our age.
We can't concentrate on school because we're all potheads.
We can't behave in class because we are all intoxicated.
We can't have fun because we have ruined it for ourselves.
It isn't the boss' fault. It's our own.
How stupid can we get?
How dumb can our actions be?
How naïve can one class be?
How dense can we be to not know we have to grow up sometime soon?
How irresponsible can we get to still be lighting up in the bathrooms?
Why can't we just learn?
If we aren’t willing to learn in the classroom, we should learn from life and our mistakes.
Listen to what people tell us we should know and what to and not to do.
"Don’t do drugs."
"Don’t drink and drive."
"Do your homework."
"Take responsibility for your actions."
"Listen up. You might learn something."
"Don’t waste your life."
"Just because you dreams have died, don’t drag me down, I’ve still got mine." (Smile Empty Soul)
I swear, some of us look like we are just so miserable and exhausted from all the drinking and ecstasy and pot.
It makes me feel exhausted.
I hate that feeling.
Like I'm sick of the alcohol being in my veins.
Like I can't handle another hit.
Like I really need that cigarette between classes.
Like I live for the party every weekend with all the Vodka and Skyy.
It’s so strange because I don’t live for any of this.
There are just too many of you who do, and it rubs off.
Everyone is exhausted.
Even if they slept all weekend.
Has anyone ever been straight edge and felt like they have betrayed their parents' trust because they come home from school?
Anyone? Anyone at all?
It's disappointing and degrading to our school’s society of students.
Just stop. Get your life together.
I know I can't change they way any of you feel or what you do on weekends,
But at least grow up

"The green of your eyes
That you get from your father
Shows your personality,
Such a young girl with an equally
Young and foolish heart."
~Lynn M

© Copyright 2004 Lynn Moynahan - All Rights Reserved
rose
Member
since 2003-08-02
Posts 53

1 posted 2004-01-12 07:37 PM


well.  that was intense...i definitely hear ya on that one...its the same way in my school. im sick of all these people doing nothing with their lives, wasting what they have been given...throwing all their talents and opportunities away.  smoking in the bathrooms...being stoned all the time...just stupid.  anyway, not to reiterate what you just said, but im just saying that i agree.  thanks for posting that one.
in terms of stylistic stuff or whatever, it's a bit on the long side, and could definitely be trimmed down, because it gets a little redundant.  and it's more just stream of consciousness than a poem, but i guess that works in this intsance.  overall, good write...you ask some very poignant questions...ones that today's youth would do well to pay attention to.

sweet_lost_palestinian1
Member
since 2004-01-08
Posts 90

2 posted 2004-01-12 07:55 PM


hey....well ummm listen i have many problems in school too but just take my advice ignore people like them all they need is a metal hospital..dont waste ur time on themm and crying and killing ur self for them...u got a future they dont u will get ur degree and u willl have followed ur dreams soo dont waste ur time...by the way [im a muslim girl]i wear the hijab they treate me like crazyy...butdo u think i care?... they even judge me without knowing me ..soo just be urself dont ever care...listen to me i promise u ,u will servive...and if anyone talk about me i just stand up for myself and my beliefs ....they try to take out my hijab even [and espcially most of the girls]..and they even trick me from stairs and even call me osama bin laden's daughter but i dont caree.....just stand up ffor ur selff i promise u with all my heart u will servive if u do...

peace

lilibeelee
Member
since 2001-07-12
Posts 143

3 posted 2004-01-12 08:56 PM


I liked this.
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