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A locker with my name, a bunk with no springs
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A locker with my name, a bunk with no springs |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN 
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A locker with my name, a bunk with no springs I'll spray my cologne on heavy so you can smell the scent i have. Put your perfume on as well so i can guess at the kinda, take a stab. We'll never get close enough to notice these secret plans, our rooms are so far away from the place we once held hands. if only the pictures could become alive like us, these lonely days would pass and we could find some trust. this soda can is tipped in recognition of youthful years, the radio is turned off to remind of the wasted tears. A dripping faucet breaks the eternal silence that shrouds, and a black eye keeps making these little clouds, but marlbed days inside my house of a thousand tired lows kill of the blackbird's lies even though he stands beside the crow. lay near my muffled whipsers that sleep cold next to your ear and warm it up with your thoughts, melt them when i come close and near. stonewalled words convince me that the only perversion took place at your birth and quick, clean conversion. please dont let Haet Harbour become crowded with ships, but sink them upon entrance to the bay and stop all their exotic trips. misunderstanding collides when an iceberg meets your Titanic, scream to me and I'll save you when all around are frantic. I'll sink to the icy depths and join the in oceanic songs. This choir is led my by Davy Jones himself, backed by the heart that died, but longs. Heart, Mind, Silence, Air, Breath, Died The Heart must Mind the Silence created by the Air that none can find, lost when Breath lied and the light died it's own deth. now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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muchos Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 102 |
this one was really long, but i enjoyed every word of it none the less. I wonder....do poems ever make you wonder. for some reason yours got me wondering about things. i dont know why. but i just wanted to share what with you. I like this one, and how it started, it cought my eye. i like it. write more!! |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I think you are very talented, as I have been reading the majority of your writings and this is not a compliment I throw around lightly. You have brought my interest back to the Teen forums.. so keep it up! |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
wow....well, thank you very much. your compliment means so much to me. muchos, thank you for complimenting on my stuff as well. -alex now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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ascending_ecstasy Member
since 2004-01-21
Posts 102 |
yeah that was good. well done, ive seen some of your stuff on dashtabs... |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
Must say, I agree with allysa,,you're work makes the teen area worth visiting,,,,,not that the other "teens" aren't talented as well, but, if I may say, you could easily post your work in the open 30 or 31 forums,,,, Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
wow...you brought this back from the michelle. thanks alot everyone for the comments. i appreciate it alot! |
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