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amnesiac
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0 posted 2004-01-03 09:03 PM


Paint the shattered remains of my heart with a dark black. Know that the good times will never come back.

Ah, but what is this? this one who is such adorable perfection...  

Hard to believe you are mine, such rare affection. Yellow isn't even my natural selection.

Ah, but what is this? are the stars out for her tonight?

Smile upon my dry heart, thats suffered such blight. Take this longing of betterment for both me and you..

Desperately entertained by everything you do...  
Every since the first night,in the dark, I smiled at you.
You are so loving, funny, sweet and true.

You broke through the night of my depression
with the light of your smile.
And now every second with you
Is more than worth my while.

[This message has been edited by amnesiac (01-03-2004 11:27 PM).]

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1 posted 2004-01-04 03:14 AM


::Sniff, sniff:: is love in the air this season or what! My goodness there are a lot of happy in love people! YAY!! This brings great joy to my heart, may I be the first to welcome you to pip! It is my hope that you have a long happy healthy stay here among us! Please check your email for a specail note.
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

the_fortress
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2 posted 2004-01-04 03:25 AM


I liked this a lot.  What wonderful imagery throughout the poem.  Reminds me of a romantic night.  But thats just me.  Great poem!
never_a_princess
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3 posted 2004-01-05 06:07 PM


WELCOME TO PIP!!!!!   err.

whattasap.. i was properly warned though. maybe next time i'll listen and not read.. :P

hm. i like this. not so much some of the rhyming.. but i really dig the last two lines.

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