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moonguardian2004
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0 posted 2004-01-05 08:58 PM


I would like some suggestions on a title for this poem.


There comes a time
To remember how you've shone
It is a time when you disembark
And venture out on your own

To remember the days
That you sailed through a class
The security of knowing
That you were going to pass

Lifelong friends are made during then
There they are, with you through the year
The thought of leaving them
Makes me afraid and also shed a tear

My daily companions
Are leaving me alone
I come to realize
I need to make it on my own

My friends do stay
In my heart is where they lie
To me it doesn't matter....
I don't care where they reside

New friends are on their way
For this i am sure
Many may be wrong choices
People who come with well thought out lures

Friends are my world
And will be when i leave
We knew it would happen
We just need a reprieve

When all is said and done
And we go our separate ways
I'll always look back
On our high school days

© Copyright 2004 Meredith - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-01-06 11:49 PM


sigh...I just wrote a poem similiar to this about leaving everything I know behind soon so I can relate. As for a title I would hazard to suggest Memories in the future or maybe friendship's circle...just my two cents!
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

the_fortress
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2 posted 2004-01-07 12:13 PM


I enjoyed this a lot.  I don't know what it's like to lose friends from high school since I am still there.  But, you described how it feels to be in school.  The good and the bad.  How about "looking back"  Or even "The good old days".
moonguardian2004
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3 posted 2004-01-07 08:09 PM


Thanks for your replies. I really like them all. I think I might go with Looking Back. That seems to really fit. Thanks again!

~*To be a star, you must shine your own light, follow your own path and don't worry about the darkness for that is when stars shine oh so bright !~

ascending_ecstasy
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4 posted 2004-02-01 12:08 PM


yeah you're not bad...
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5 posted 2004-02-01 09:57 AM


How about
"Changing times"
very nice write
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

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