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Teen Poetry #7

One Minute...

BWriter22
New Member

since 2004-01-03

Posts 4

0 posted 2004-01-03 05:21 PM

One Minute...

I saw you, our eyes met
you smiled and I dont regret
falling in love in just 1 minute
staring in your eyes like your heart was in it
breathing deeper I couldnt believe
my heart was content
filled up with joyous glee
But I didnt know you
not even your name
a flicker of light,
and a blink of the eye
I saw you again passing by
pulling the courage to talk to you
I stepped up with out knowing what to do
words came to my head,
but none seemed right
whispering I love you, with so much fright
you looked in my eyes, gave me a smile
and said these words that made me go wild
" I fell in love with you a minute ago,
and now I will never let you go "

-Bryan_V.-

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

1 posted 2004-01-03 07:35 PM

first off, welcome to piptalk. your poem was pretty good, it was a typical love poem. you stopped rhyming right in the middle, you might want to take a look at that.keep posting stuff!!
-alex

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

2 posted 2004-01-04 03:08 AM

Awww...how sweet, we have another romantic to add to the list! Welcome to pip my friend and may you have a long warm and happy stay! check your email for a specail note!
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

lilibeelee
Member

since 2001-07-12

Posts 143

3 posted 2004-01-09 10:23 PM

I liked this one a lot. keep up the good work!

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