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lilibeelee
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0 posted 2004-01-03 02:13 AM


My heart races
My Breath becomes short

Hard to breathe
Hard to control

My nerves try to calm
As the butterflies swarm

I feel like I'm weightless
My heart feels so warm

The way you look at me
The way you hold me
Just the way you are

You take my hand
You took my heart

You take my breath away
You take me away

Away from this world
Away from this chaos

My spirit has found its match
At last it he has arrived
Knowing we both belong

This fear I once had
Of a nightmare to come true
Has all disappeared
Just when I met you

My doubts have drifted
I know this is true
My fear has been cast

I want to love you forever
And forever is what I'll do

At last I feel complete
At last I found you

© Copyright 2004 Lisa - All Rights Reserved
lilibeelee
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1 posted 2004-01-03 02:17 AM


Sorry bit of an error on one line there where it says:
At last it he has arrived

I ment at last he has arrived

anyways, hope you all enjoy this one.

*Belabebeautiful*
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2 posted 2004-01-03 02:47 AM


Sigh...a love poem...I always enjoy reading these, there is so much fear and mistrust in the world is reassuring to know that there is still love and hope to go along with it. Beautiful piece, you emotions were vibrantly clear throughout and it was very sweet.
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
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Indianapolis, IN
3 posted 2004-01-03 11:01 AM


i agree with bela, the emotions in it were great. i really enjoyed this one and i usually dontlike love ones that much.
-alex

now im alone, but not lonely like before

muchos
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since 2003-11-29
Posts 102

4 posted 2004-01-03 02:07 PM


itza gooder. i always write love poems. so its good when you can relate. i loved this piece. keep it up
frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23
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my own special world
5 posted 2004-01-03 06:05 PM


this was so sweet, I also always write love poems, and I really enjoy reading them too because I can relate to them so well.

~*~Karen~*~

~You can close your eyes to things that you don’t want to see, but you can’t close your heart to things you don’t want to feel~

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