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Teen Poetry #7

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the_fortress
Junior Member

since 2003-12-31

Posts 28

0 posted 2004-01-01 01:50 AM

Hi, this is the first poem that i'm going to post. I want to see what you people have to think. Let me know please.

Constant bickering
About life’s little problems
Financial problems are issues
And issues as told
Not for a kid inside
Not ready to grow old
Looking and feeling
Just isn’t enough
Becoming is frightful
Frightful enough

I’ve made up my mind
No turning back
The rejection bag is full now
And ready to crack
But the fears keep coming
Into my head
Pushing them away
I crawl into bed

Am I different
From the rest?
Or do I fall
Second best?
I hate the stresses
Of being here
Wanting again
To belittle myself

muchos
Member

since 2003-11-29

Posts 102

1 posted 2004-01-01 01:53 PM

this was a very good post. a few parts seem forced, but we all have that problem. i know how you feel in this poem, its life's little lessons i guess. have a good new year, keep your chin up

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

2 posted 2004-01-01 07:44 PM

Very nicely done! Welcome to piptalk and may you have a warm and happy stay. I enjoyed this post and it seemed to flow quite well though I do agree with Muchos on the forced part. You have just explained something that I think happens to all of us at one time or another old enough now to face reality but still young enough to not want to. Please check your email for a little note!
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

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