My Heart is on the floor...Why dont you step on it????

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Sweetest Sorrow X
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since 2004-01-19

Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket

0 posted 2004-08-16 11:45 PM

what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger
but is a little bit of stregnth really worth this pain?
and how do you know the difference
between the pain of death
and the eternal ache of heartbreak?
when you're hurting bad like this
death might seem like an easy way out
but how do you uncover the value...
unless you're already dead?

The plaster dented from you fist..In the hall where you had your first kiss..Reminds you that the memorys wont fade

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2004-08-18 05:42 PM

hmm..this was sort of confusing. The ending was anyways...i liked it, it made me think, which doesnt happen very often...
lol

Karissa

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

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The World of Poetry

2 posted 2004-08-18 10:50 PM

So maybe this isn't your best work, but like karissa said, it got me thinking which i like doing when i'm reading a poem.

Also, I just love the titles of your poems. They are so original...how do you think them up?

~Alli~

I always knew looking back on the tears would make me laugh, but I never knew looking back on the laughter would make me cry.

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

3 posted 2004-08-20 11:14 PM

the value of death.
Good point at the end.
short, and heartfelt.

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

4 posted 2004-08-23 10:08 PM

I really like this one alot. Especially, "and how do you know the difference between the pain of death and eternal ache of heartbreak."
The end was also really good.
Thanks for sharing.

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

A.L
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since 2003-03-15

Posts 131

5 posted 2004-09-08 12:41 PM

wow..this is awesome..you think like me, you put it better on paper though

I see me frowning in your eyes...
I see the fear in you...
Where no one ever should be...

::From Autumn To Ashes::

A.L
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since 2003-03-15

Posts 131

6 posted 2004-09-09 12:47 PM

gonna add this to my library

A.L
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since 2003-03-15

Posts 131

7 posted 2004-09-09 12:48 PM

ok...that didnt work..lets try again! sry

I see me frowning in your eyes...
I see the fear in you...
Where no one ever should be...

::From Autumn To Ashes::

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

8 posted 2004-09-09 06:41 PM

So maybe this isn't your best work, but like karissa said, it got me thinking which i like doing when i'm reading a poem.
Also, I just love the titles of your poems. They are so original...how do you think them up?

~Alli~

well, all of the titles are from songs. i have heard all of the songs that the titles come from. that is one of my dislikes about your writing. the titles are plaigerized. also your stuff is a bit too emo. like it's got the emo cliches. try and expand your thought processes and subject matters. keep writing

Sweetest Sorrow X
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since 2004-01-19

Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket

9 posted 2004-09-10 04:41 PM

I know they are from bands,and to say I admit that,but yeah it is plagiarism,but you know how commen that is,its a trend to put Emo lyrics in your aim profile now days, so there is a shitload of plagiarism, i just put lyrics so it catches attention.

I believe that lovers should be tied together and thrown into the ocean in the worst of weather and left there to drownin their innocence

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