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young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2003-12-29 10:03 AM


neon sign distorted by rain

tonight was strange for the first time,
you werent comfortable at all.
you hid something again this time
and im helpless to help you.

all i ask is a little trust,
let me be a confidante.
im tired of knowing you're bothered
and the denials that follows my questions.
now im driving home to bed
to lay in sheets rank of distrust,
no matter how much i wash them
the smell stays to remind me.
i turn my music up loud
to puch these thoughts out of my head,
but the billboards spell out your messages:
"im fine, (not really, but ill force a smile)."
my windshield wipers must be broken
or maybe its my eyes that are,
none of the moisture is moved away,
it stays in my vision as i drive on.
let me be your best
someone to be counted on,
and ill count the number
of times you open up.

i guess im crying for you,
though im not near at all,
my tears flow just the same
and i hide them like you.
i miss you more than
you'llever find in my letters,
more than you'll ever find
in my iris' when they take you in.
please say to me
"hey i wanna talk."
i'll drop what im doing
and listen to your every word.

tonight was strange for the last time,
i'll comfort you when it's needed.
you'll hide things again sometime,
but i'll be there to hold you when you cry.

now im alone, but not lonely like before

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since 2003-01-03
Posts 696
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1 posted 2003-12-29 01:36 PM


I know well how to hide my emotions as I tend to not trust very easily but I know also it hurts those close to me for not opening up to them when all they want to do is help...Lovely emotions and beautiful write.
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
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2 posted 2003-12-29 09:22 PM


Another beautiful poem from you. I love this soo much. Very good imagery, and emotions.
I can relate to this, like Bela said.
Going in my library.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
3 posted 2003-12-30 03:24 PM


thank you very much guys
muchos
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since 2003-11-29
Posts 102

4 posted 2004-01-03 04:12 PM


this is a beautiful write. im not to familiar with your work, but out of what i've read, its all been very mature, and well thought out. i like this one a lot, and like the others, i can totally relate, maybe a little too much. keep it up and i look forward to reading a lot more. nice write
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