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kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

0 posted 2003-12-29 02:16 AM

PIECES

I love you.
Three simple words,
one big impact.

You shouldn't have said it,
if you never really meant it.
You cut me deeper than any knife could,
when i found out your lies, your deceit.

YOu told me you loved me,
and you would always be there for me.
I was such a fool to believe
that someone could actually feel that way,
at the age of sixteen.

I had heard all the rumors,
all the girls before.
Hell one of them was my best friend!
she warned me,
but i was too wrapped up in you to listen.

YOu caused so many tears,
took so many years,
that i can never take back.

you tore my heart in peices,
and even now,
I'm still putting the peices back.

muchos
Member

since 2003-11-29

Posts 102

1 posted 2004-01-02 07:08 PM

i hear the meaning in this one, and its good. the flow was a little edgy, but all in all i liked it. besides, some guys are dogs, and you are only 16, just tell yourself that you are better then him, and you'll get over it. all girls have been there atleast once or twice. i think guys think a sure way to get into your pants are to use those 3 magic words...GIRL BE ON THE LOOK OUT!! MEN ARE DOGS SOMETIMES. hahaha keep it up girl!!

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

2 posted 2004-01-02 07:11 PM

Nice write, the emotion you put into this is really good, just remember that any guy that caused that many tears never deserves to see you again. Nice work

~*~Karen~*~

~You can close your eyes to things that you don’t want to see, but you can’t close your heart to things you don’t want to feel~

broken627
Member

since 2003-11-26

Posts 66
Eugene Oregon

3 posted 2004-01-02 08:30 PM

hunnie i know exactly how you are feeling this is a really good poem too!I love all of your stuff!
cant wait to hear more
and guys are most definetly dogs!
-*-broken627-*-

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

4 posted 2004-01-03 02:37 AM

hmm...I always saw guys as pigs personally! heh I'm just kidding we all have our downfalls the girls and the guys. Kissa nicely written piece, possibly a favorite from you.
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~