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Sweetest Sorrow X
Member

since 2004-01-19

Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket

0 posted 2004-08-16 11:39 PM

summer nights and cigarettes
the gentle sound of drizzle overhead
as i sit here by candlelight
the words flow onto the page
the pen; fueling the emotions
and my thoughts spilling out on paper
the calmness is felt; spreading
throughout my entire body
the crickets; chirping the lullaby
which softens the pain dangling
on the threads of my heart
numbing the senses of the air
beginning to grow colder
the raindrops falling around me
and the flame dancing at my fingertips
as the words continue to flow
surpressing the anguish within
and releasing a growing warmth
as memories fly into mind
of this summer of growing <3

The plaster dented from you fist..In the hall where you had your first kiss..Reminds you that the memorys wont fade

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2004-08-17 03:07 PM

calmness...would flow better as: calm.
and growing..in the last line, would sound better as: growth.
I enjoyed this.
writing is healing.
It has saved me so many times, from myself.

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

2 posted 2004-08-18 12:50 PM

ahhh, such a sweet, beautiful write, I enjoyed this a great deal reminds me of the many times that I have also sat down to let myself reminise and heal through my poetry. Very well done.
~Live and Laugh~

Don't look to me for perfection for I will surely let you down.
~Bella~

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

3 posted 2004-08-18 10:16 PM

Yes, writing is healing...it has saved me from myself many times...like lexy said.

I really liked this poem, i think it migh be a fav. from you...

Karissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

4 posted 2004-08-21 10:22 AM

this summer of growing... love that
wow i loved this whole thing.... great job
this is beautiful

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

5 posted 2004-08-28 10:21 PM

Although this poem was not my favorite from you, I really enjoyed it. It flowed so well...and I was able to relate. I, like you, have been able to heal by writing poetry...

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

6 posted 2004-08-29 12:34 PM

Good work. This poem was well written. APPLAUDING! ~Jess

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." -Jimi Hendrix

LegalSecret69
Member

since 2003-06-04

Posts 69
Virginia

7 posted 2004-08-30 12:30 PM

Very beautiful. I liked this...it has a calm rhythm to it...very nice job.

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