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Baby D
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since 2003-10-26
Posts 14


0 posted 2003-12-24 04:26 AM


When you said you loved me,
you really sounded genuine,
and when you said you cared,
i never really picked up on the signs,
'cause when you said these things,
you never looked me in the eye,
but i still can't figure out,
why you thought it'd be easier to lie.

even though it was a while ago,
i've never stopped hurting,
still i'm acting like i'm fine,
but i was never good at charades,
this game your playing is messing with my mind,
maybe i'll forgive,
but i know i'll never forget,
all the things that happened,
all the times we shared,
through happiness and sadness,
i thought you'd always be there.

i thought our love was strong,
and i thought we'd make it through,
but you collapsed under pressure,
i never thought giving up was something you would do,
maybe i wasnt worth it,
maybe it was a waste of time,
maybe i'll get over you,
maybe eventually, through time,
but for now i'll just keep walking,
keep my head up and smile,
i'll just pretend i'm happy for a little while.


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young_blood
Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
1 posted 2003-12-24 03:30 PM


once again it sounds like linkin park to me. sorry, but it just doesnt seem to have any imagery or imagination in it. you should expand on the whole charades thing more.keep posting!!
-alex

Baby D
Junior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 14

2 posted 2003-12-25 02:19 AM


wow linkin park, i'd take that as a compliment, lol,but thats not what it was meant to sound like, thanx for ur suggestions anyways, i'll defeinately think about them next time i write.
and you were right bout the very early writes,they were writtin a while ago.
Thanx - Dani

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