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WinterWren
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...Coming to

0 posted 2003-12-22 01:01 AM



Picture me
with long brown hair
and hazel eyes

Picture me
with opaline tears in my eyes
as I tell you goodbye

Picture me
lying in numbness
after you give no reply

Picture me
trying to run,
with no place left to go

Picture me
dressed in black,
mourning for too many things

Picture me
desperately wanting to tell them,
but would they understand?

All these pictures
will fade with time (let them fade!)
but I think the one that hurts the most,
is telling you goodbye
still I think the one that hurts the most,
is being so utterly alone.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

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Saluting with misty eyes
1 posted 2003-12-22 01:19 PM


maybe... Picture Me?

Cause in my dreams it's always there
The evil face that twists my mind
And brings me to despair.

monkey
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since 2003-09-16
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2 posted 2003-12-22 01:21 PM


rarr dawg! good poem i likey!

thinktwice
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3 posted 2003-12-23 11:12 AM


i liked this alot. a few possible titles could be:

1. Picture of fading sorrow
2. A picture of mourning
3. Lonliness in a picture
4. Picture me
5. Sorrowful Reverie

WinterWren
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4 posted 2003-12-23 12:11 PM


Hey monkey! I mean, dawg. lol.
thinktwice: Im glad you liked it . Thanks for the title suggestions, I think I just might use one of those.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

martina
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5 posted 2003-12-25 10:35 PM


This is a great poem i also think it should be called picture me.
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6 posted 2003-12-27 03:35 PM


Such a sad beautiful poem. the imagery and word choice was wonderful as always. As for a title suggestion I kept seeing your sad eyes in my mind so I would go for Haunted eyes or lonely eyes.
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

DaNi:H
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7 posted 2003-12-28 10:08 AM


i like picture me  
i like this poem it's very good

DaNi    
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first poem ever written: I do

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