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Sweetpoet16m4u04
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since 2002-11-10

Posts 153
Ma, U.S.A

0 posted 2003-12-15 06:51 PM

I cry because of your eyes;
  Breathtaking and deep,
   Showing what you truly feel.
I cry because of your arms;
  Holding me tight,
   Always and forever.
I cry because of your lips;
  Sweet and gentle,
   Passionate and loving.
I cry because of your hands;
  Soft and delicate,
   Caressing and holding mine.
I cry because you are you;
  The girl from my dreams,
   The girl of my dreams.
I cry because you care.
But most of all,
  I cry because of what you have done to me.
  You made me happier than anyone else could.
  You opened up a world of new feelings.
  You made my life complete.
I cry... because I love you.
And I cry because this is just a dream that will never be…………

PrincessNets
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since 2002-10-30

Posts 103
NewYork, USA

1 posted 2003-12-16 02:21 PM

Wow! That is a really good poem. I feel like that about this one guy whom I really like. I can really relate to the feelings you have expressed. Good job. Hope to read more soon.

~Jeanette~

frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

2 posted 2003-12-16 05:28 PM

I can also really relate to that, but I haven't been able to realize it as just a hopeless dream yet, I still live each day waiting. Nice write

~*~Karen~*~

~All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to pursue them~Walt Disney

skyshine

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since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

3 posted 2003-12-16 06:44 PM

I think we all dream of that....nicely done.

~sky

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

broken627
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since 2003-11-26

Posts 66
Eugene Oregon

4 posted 2003-12-17 06:22 PM

wow i think you just described every feeling that im feeling right now of my ex boyfriend

I would love to hear more of your poetry!
-*-Broken627-*-
Love is like a puzzle when the pieces dont fit you have to move on

peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

5 posted 2003-12-17 09:00 PM

*Claps* Great work! I loved how this poem led up to the last line. Awesome work! ~Jess

"Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse

muchos
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since 2003-11-29

Posts 102

6 posted 2003-12-26 12:29 PM

hey hun, great poem i loved it. too bad that girl didnt know what she had. smile!! you'll get a girl who truly deserves your sensitivity and soft heartidness. have a great christmas!

Strider612
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since 2003-12-21

Posts 46
Alabama, United States of America

7 posted 2003-12-26 08:51 PM

A guy who can admit what makes him cry...just thinking about it. Good work, I might add. Keep it up.

*Belabebeautiful*

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since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

8 posted 2003-12-27 03:23 PM

loved the post, it was simply breathtaking in its emoiton. I can relate well up untill the last line unfortunatly but I do remember what that evil pain feels like. In general you want to be carefull of repetitiveness of a word or phrase as it will bore the readers but in this instance I think you pulled it off well and indeed actually helped in stamping that emotion in the readers minds as they read. Nicely done.
~live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

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