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Trouble Breathing
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since 2002-11-12
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0 posted 2003-12-14 05:08 AM



Have you ever sat alone,
On a bench in the park?
Not a sight,Not a moan
Just you sitting alone,
On a wooden bench next to a telephone,
These are the thing I see in my mind,
No cause and effect,
Just a head full of static,
Been tangled and wrecked,
I can't even see what's not in my mind,
I think I'm finally going blind
You'd see what you can find,
if you could just...

Get into my head,
Maybe you would see,
No matter what I do,
No matter how I try,
I'll always be half the man I used to be,

On the outside looking in,
That is not how I am
But I know if you could just...

Get into my head,
Maybe you would understand,
How I think is who I am,
But who I am is not who I choose to be,
And if I cannot be who I want to be,
And I cannot think like I want to think,
What is there left to say...

When all I want is to weep myself to sleep?
But I cannot sleep,
I cannot cry,
I can't afford to sink,
Because all this time, my eyes stayed open,
I'm afraid to even blink

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frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23
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my own special world
1 posted 2003-12-14 12:30 PM


I think this flowed really well, I've been in that situation before so I know how you feel, nice write

~*~Karen~*~

~All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to pursue them~Walt Disney

skyshine
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Beneath the northern stars
2 posted 2003-12-14 03:23 PM


Sometimes I feel like half the person I used to be. In fact, I'm sure everyone has felt like that. Well done!

~sky

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
3 posted 2003-12-20 04:39 PM


This poem would make an awesome song! You should try adding some music to it! I really liked it and i hope to hear more!
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