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desperado16
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since 2003-12-27
Posts 7


0 posted 2004-01-05 12:41 PM


Quiet envelopes,
Only sounds of
Whistling winds
Heard,
Lingering beside,
Steadily evaporating
From your
Thoughts.

You roam,
Free of
Love and tribulation,
While I remain,
Bound by
Shackles of
Love.

Love,
Turned too
Great, forbids
Sanity,
Must escape,
Until sentiments
Wither.

Worless tones
Spew from
Trembling lips,
Cheeks glisten
From restrained
Droplets,
Surging from
Empty holes,
Heart seeps,
Body bleeds,
I perceive,
The intricacy of
Impending tasks.

I fear,
When I barricade
Myself,
Misery will
Brew,
Friendship will
Perish,
I'll diminish,
Regretting,
Not able to
Hold you,
At all.

Silence breaks,
Static actualizes,
Goodbye unmasks
Itself,
Half rejoices,
Half grieves,
Either way,
I forfeit
You.

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Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
1 posted 2004-01-05 07:58 PM


hmmm...
well, I liked the rythum.
I liked the poem, the ryhme.
I liked the fourth stanza the best.
Very beautiful.

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