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infinite disaster
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since 2003-06-01
Posts 69
Illinois

0 posted 2003-12-12 12:26 PM


A master of disguises
She can fool anyone
To unknown eyes
She is seemingly perfect
But behind the facade
Lies something that she cannot conceal
Herself
No longer can she be dishonest to herself
No longer can she pretend
Secrets becoming a hassle
Trying to hide the truth
It slowly takes the life
Of a once vibrant girl
She tries to be honest
But after lying to herself for so many years
She finds it difficult
A master of disguises
Does she no longer know what to do
Peeling away the disguises
She is coming closer
To revealing the secrets
The pain, the words
She has once been so scared to share
She needs to find it in herself
To be the person she knows she can be
With each mask revealing itself
She is ashamed of the secrets she held
She tries to hold onto the last mask
Afraid of the future, herself
But with a deep breath she lets go
Shaking, she takes the last mask off
She is no longer the master of disguises

I am proof that the heart is a risky fuel to burn.

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young_blood
Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
1 posted 2003-12-12 01:04 PM


this one was pretty good. the beginning was good and the end was good, but the middle made me lose interest.hmmm...its kind of just mediocre writing in the middle. throw something in to make it stand out.

now im alone, but not lonely like before

infinite disaster
Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 69
Illinois
2 posted 2003-12-15 11:33 AM


thanks ... but yeah, i think that the middle part isn't that great either

I am proof that the heart is a risky fuel to burn.

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