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young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2003-12-11 04:05 PM


this is another poem for my cousin nic....

beside you

im throwing down my heart
to lie on the ground next to yours.
im shedding these dry tears
because we both have emptied our store.
im hanging onto prayers
for this life is leaving us alone.
im standing at the grave with you
because pain has left you broken boned.

im crying out to you
because your sobs are so loud.
im seeing right to
all the pain inside that clouds.
if only it was enough,
if only sympathy could go so far,
i'd help you find the way
that leads you to her shining star.

wind blows the leaves around our feet
and the lights outside cast shadows,
the falling snow makes a tearlit burial
all the more desperately sorrowful.
sing the sorrow in a strong voice,
sing it until your throat bleeds black.
sing the sorrow with your tears,
im sure that nic already has....

now im alone, but not lonely like before

© Copyright 2003 Alex Lewis - All Rights Reserved
branden726
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Bay City, MI
1 posted 2003-12-11 04:22 PM


Nice, Very nice and the fact that your writting about helping someone I do believe with the loss of someone warms me up inside since i've just lost someone in sept. But please Do remember this okay young, If they push you away its not your fault its that there afraid and never give up on helping someone just take it more slowly.

Allysa
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2 posted 2003-12-12 02:44 PM


I have to agree with branden.

Once again, a very touching write.  You're writing is some of the best I've seen around this forum in a while.

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
3 posted 2003-12-12 02:50 PM


thank you so much for commenting on my stuff!! it means alot that you guys read this stuff

now im alone, but not lonely like before

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