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Teen Poetry #7

Shades of Life

muchos
Member

since 2003-11-29

Posts 102

0 posted 2003-12-09 09:53 PM

All the pretty blues caress
With all the different shades
It makes you think of happiness
Until the color fades

Your life is not as crazy
The colors aren't as bright
Everythings so hazy
The colors are so light

Wishing they were bright again
The colors made you smile
Hoping that they'll cure the pain
And make it all worth while

The days that they were bright
They made you feel great
Until they faded very light
And now its all too late
this isnt my best work, but its got meaning. be gentle!!

TheGirlNoOneKnew
Member

since 2003-12-04

Posts 92
PA, USA

1 posted 2003-12-10 04:10 AM

Hmm...well I do get the message and your intent behind this and I like it alot. However your repetition of "bright","light" and "colors" makes it kind of hard to follow. : /

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