Lover Who I Don't Want To Love

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Teen Poetry #7

Lover Who I Don't Want To Love

lovergirl
Junior Member

since 2003-08-18

Posts 12

0 posted 2003-12-07 07:13 PM

I look at you in your eyes.
To find you again is one big surprise.
In my head I see something.
Something that makes my heart want to scream.
How can these feelings still be in me?
How can I see what I right now see?
I don't know why you're still in my heart.
I don't know why you're still tearing me appart.
Why am I so attracted to you?
Why do I like everything you do?

broken627
Member

since 2003-11-26

Posts 66
Eugene Oregon

1 posted 2003-12-07 07:16 PM

Its short but its really good...I know exactly what your feeling...I cant wait to read more of your poetry!
-*-Broken627-*-

TheGirlNoOneKnew
Member

since 2003-12-04

Posts 92
PA, USA

2 posted 2003-12-07 09:48 PM

I liked this, but the only part that didn't seem to fit was this:

In my head I see something.
Something that makes my heart want to scream.

The rest of the poem rhymes but this seems a little off. It's understandable though, sometimes it's hard to find words that go well together.

xoxo

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

3 posted 2003-12-29 02:35 AM

I know how ya feel hun, and it sucks! This peom is really good though, and I hope to hear more!
~kissa~

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