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adbdesperado18
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since 2003-11-30
Posts 33


0 posted 2003-12-06 05:25 PM


Here,
Standing before me,
Appears a figure of perfection,
Her eyes,
Lightest of the light,
Shimmering like diamonds,
Amidst the darkness of the night,
Her soft lips,
Ideally heart shaped,
Her skin,
Gleaming with radiance,
Her flowing chestnut hair,
Lying gingerly upon her shoulders,
But only I see,
The deep cracks her crimson lips suffer from,
Induced by burns
Received from murderous winds,
The jagged scars,
Inhabiting every inch of skin,
Created by claw-like branches of gnarled trees,
Tearing,
At her already mangled body,
Her hair,
Thoroughly incinerated,
From fires blazing around her,
Her glimmering pale eyes,
Filled with tears from crisp, cold air
And brutal, relentless beatings she endures,
Each, and every day,
For the heroine she portrays,
And the act she plays,
Tells you nothing of the sort.
11/28/03


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Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
1 posted 2003-12-06 07:27 PM


Wow, what a twist. AWESOME job, I liked this one a lot.

Tell me, how does it feel, to treat me like you do?~Orgy

magic_612
Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 190
NB, Canada
2 posted 2003-12-06 09:30 PM


I agree.. great job
Paragon
Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 114

3 posted 2003-12-07 09:58 PM


Very expressive write, with a poignance that is rarely rivaled by poetry these days. You're word choice and visual descriptions were wonderful and told a story of their own.
Well done,

Paragon

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