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kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
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0 posted 2003-12-04 08:03 PM




Tell me what you think of this. I'm not so sure about some of it. Thanx!


     Two-Faced

I never thought it'd happen,
especially to me.
Then one day it did.
I felt warm and tingly,
Scared yet ecited,
But most of all i felt whole.

I never wanted to leave your side,
Afraid that you would break my heart,
and you did.

I gave you everything.
I gave you my heart, my soul, my love,
but not my body.
I wasn't ready.
I refused to give that up to you.
not yet,
and you broke my heart into peices.

I wish you could see,
how trampled my heart was after you left.
To see you walk away,
and not look back.
To see you with those girls.
Those sluts you only want for one thing.
actually after i think about it,
They arent the sluts,
you are.

I actually pitty those girls,
they are completley and utterly clueless
to the real you,
the lying, hateful, two-faced, using, wannabe player that you really are.

I look into their innocent faces,
and I hate you.

© Copyright 2003 Karissa - All Rights Reserved
TheGirlNoOneKnew
Member
since 2003-12-04
Posts 92
PA, USA
1 posted 2003-12-05 04:11 PM


Very good vent! lol I know a guy like that and believe me you are better off without him. The flow was nice and you got your point across pretty clearly.


magic_612
Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 190
NB, Canada
2 posted 2003-12-05 04:27 PM


great job.. good story with a twist. Too many times the slutty girl gets blamed for it all.
pammy
Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 50
California
3 posted 2003-12-05 08:56 PM


hey i really like this.your point is well understood and i know plenty of guys like that

[This message has been edited by pammy (12-05-2003 08:57 PM).]

Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
4 posted 2003-12-05 09:06 PM


I agree with everyone else. Well done, you descrided it well.

Tell me, how does it feel, to treat me like you do?~Orgy

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