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Deep_Inside
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since 2002-02-14
Posts 377
i can't stop hiding

0 posted 2003-11-30 09:39 PM



I can’t remember
The last time I cried
The last time I was found
The last time I died

I can’t remember
The last time I walked away
The last time I needed
The last time I wanted to stay

I can’t remember
The last time I was caught
The last time I strained to think
The last time my mind was shot

But I can remember
The last time I was told they care
The last time they didn’t worry
The last time they didn’t need to be there

I can remember
The last time I stood still
The last time I wanted
The last time I said “I will”

I can remember
The last time I was blamed
The last time I found I knife
The last time I was maimed

when you live you begin to die
when you die memories of you life lives in others
when memories of you begin to fade
you truly begin to die

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young_blood
Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
1 posted 2003-11-30 09:49 PM


wow....this was great, really really good. wow....this is the best thing i have read from you.. awesome aweseom poem.
-alex

now im alone, but not lonely like before

Ally Stone
Junior Member
since 2003-10-20
Posts 48
D.C.
2 posted 2003-12-01 08:16 PM


YES,I definitely agree with young blood on this. Good job, keep it up!
THE-1-U-DISLIKE
Junior Member
since 2003-11-07
Posts 20

3 posted 2003-12-01 11:06 PM


oooh nice job
kissa~rachelle
Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
4 posted 2003-12-02 05:43 PM


WOW! Thats like all I can think of to say. Very very nice!
**~kissa~**

Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
5 posted 2003-12-02 10:55 PM


um,
I'm not particularly fond.
So perhaps I shouldn't have responded.
but, it is just so repeative.
it's almost boring.
I'm not saying
what you have to say is boring,
just the way you presented it is a bit weak.
Expand on your feelings instead of just stating them.
maybe

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