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silence |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa 
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A new silence has touched my ears A silence that holds pains and fears It engulfs me; mind body and soul The dark cloud come upon me like an angry mob I sheild my ears hoping for it not to penetrate but it does; it always does My heart breaks for what it brings me the pain of others lifted onto my heart I can't get away from this silence When I look at them the silence hits me through the stillness of their eye they send it to me, right to me The silence lingers after awhile I just get used to it The more they look they more that is piled on me the pain, hurt, heartbreaks, fears I can hear it all silently " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I really liked your poem, it was very good! It is very true too! I hope to hear more. ~kissa~ |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
Good job!! YOu did an excelent job at describing that horrible feeling. Keep writing. I know exactly how you feel! |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Hmmm...well I have to admit there are others of yours that I've liked better but this one was very well done. To me it almost sounding like you were ranting, like you were filling up the void because you couldn't take the silence anymore...that may not be the case but that was my take on it, and while it seemed to ramble it also pointed out a clear meaining behind the words which is always a great quality to have in writing. ~Live and Laugh~ Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less |
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Ally Stone Junior Member
since 2003-10-20
Posts 48D.C. |
Good job, nicely done. |
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broken627 Member
since 2003-11-26
Posts 66Eugene Oregon |
This was great i felt i could really relate to it!Keep on writing good job! -*-broken627-*- |
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