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Teen Poetry #7

crappy poem

duncan idaho
Member

since 2003-11-14

Posts 70
dune

0 posted 2003-11-23 02:53 PM

I saw you terrified.
why not
call the cops.
I'm only hurting myself
These self inflicted
bruises don't
hurt.
I found myself.
You haven't.
everything i see, I inspire
with my hatred.
everything you see, is inspired
with Jesus. I already lost him.
Fake ideals disapear and all that
is left
IS THE TRAGEDY.
oh poor poor child

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

1 posted 2003-11-23 07:55 PM

well hello my pretty....hahahahahahahahahaha

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

2 posted 2003-12-02 05:59 PM

I liked your poem, but i dont get how you could tell spine grinder her poems suck because they are dark, when your poem is just as dark if not darker. Well, anyways, good job. I really liked it.
~kissa~

Adam Alexander
Junior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 11
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3 posted 2003-12-03 06:24 PM

Appropriate title, friend.

Match
Member

since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

4 posted 2003-12-03 10:14 PM

mmm..I don't find it that great but its alright

-ash

I know you think that I shouldnt still love you
I'll tell you that
But if I didn't say it
Well, I'd still have felt it
Where's the sense in tha

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