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Teen Poetry #7
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buckysimone
Junior Member
since 2003-10-19
Posts 27


0 posted 2003-11-22 11:14 PM


shaking
your hand underneath
masks of jesters and lies
disillusioned by
smiles of youths
scents of elderly homes
homes to the friends
friends of abusive lives
living the lives
the lives through thick pricket paths
dirty tattered jeans
rough fingernails
runaway paths surrounded
mirages of roses
finding exits
exits never to exist
in a life of dirty paper bags
cries for help
grab my hand
my savior
shaking
your hand underneath


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dertah
Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

1 posted 2003-11-23 01:23 PM


im cold.....(this has been a misdirected thought by hatred)
duncan idaho
Member
since 2003-11-14
Posts 70
dune
2 posted 2003-11-23 02:43 PM


i hate pretty much every poem on here (especially mine) but this one was very very good.  I like your raw style.  Keep it up.
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