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SwimminPoet05
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since 2003-11-14
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Massachusetts, US

0 posted 2003-11-22 09:37 PM



Alone

Lost in a dream
never-ending
A long dark trial
never pending
Eyes closed tight
tears of sadness
Knees weak with fear
slumped in a dark uncertianness
All alone, no one around
tears of lonliness
fall quietly to the ground
unheard whispers speak
Feelings of love
- unrequited
Longings of hope
- undecided
Alone

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dertah
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since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

1 posted 2003-11-22 09:41 PM


the ending just says it all doesnt it?
greco
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 85
buffalo ny
2 posted 2003-11-22 11:37 PM


All alone, no one around
tears of lonliness
fall quietly to the ground


very nice i liked how this stanza went very good wrtie very smooth and thats what kept me reading it
good write

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