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KuruShio
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since 2003-11-18
Posts 110


0 posted 2003-11-20 10:59 PM



View the mirror
See that shade
It was a man,

Me

No more however,
Dust and sand

Slave, Obedient
Master calls
I do her bidding
Her wretched whim

Live her lust
Seething sin
No more me
No more I
Ensnared, caged
Doomed to Die

Happy now?
No,
Never was
Joyful? How.
Nothing does
Tricked again
Deceived once more
No longer useful

Shown the door.

Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless.  
KuruShio  (DeadlyBob)

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PrincessNets
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since 2002-10-30
Posts 103
NewYork, USA
1 posted 2003-11-21 08:11 AM


I really like this poem.  I thought it was very unique.  Good job!

-Jeanette-

infinite disaster
Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 69
Illinois
2 posted 2003-11-21 11:09 AM


i like this poem ... like the person above says, it's unique ... keep up the great job.

much love, akie.

I am proof that the heart is a risky fuel to burn.

Deep_Inside
Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377
i can't stop hiding
3 posted 2003-11-21 12:40 PM


this poem was creative i haven't read much of your stuff but i like it;-). good job and keep writing

when you live you begin to die
when you die memories of you life lives in others
when memories of you begin to fade
you truly begin to die

dertah
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since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

4 posted 2003-11-21 01:40 PM


riddles riddles riddles....
KuruShio
Member
since 2003-11-18
Posts 110

5 posted 2003-11-21 02:20 PM


Thanks for the replys.

Riddles? Heh I do tend to do that.

Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless.  
KuruShio  (DeadlyBob)

frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23
Posts 268
my own special world
6 posted 2003-11-21 04:00 PM


This was interesting but good, nice work

~*~Karen~*~

~All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to pursue them~Walt Disney

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