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THE-1-U-DISLIKE
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0 posted 2003-11-16 03:45 AM


hi every body, this is my first poem in english hope u like it


there was someone called S.R.A

He was kind and know his way

I thought I need him

oooh what did I say

I sent him e-mail one day

I can't remember in which day

saterday maybe or monday

march or april, maybe in may

but when i talked i was shocked

i didn't know what i can say

but now i know that i was rong

that's all what i will say


[This message has been edited by THE-1-U-DISLIKE (11-18-2003 06:59 PM).]

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dertah
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1 posted 2003-11-16 12:56 PM


uhuh....correct
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2 posted 2003-11-16 03:13 PM


Welcome to Passions! What is your native language? English can be really hard to learn, but you did very well for a first-time English writer. I hope to see more of your work soon!

~Elizabeth

P.S. Check your email for a special message!

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

THE-1-U-DISLIKE
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3 posted 2003-11-18 06:57 PM


Thanks sooooooooo much skyshine,
dertah, i didnt understand what do u mean by (uhuh..... corect)

I believe that the poem is not just some words; it is a lot of feelings from the bottom of the writer heart, so the readers have to feel it before read it

but I really really really wish that HE (( S.R.A)) read it and feel it

[This message has been edited by THE-1-U-DISLIKE (11-18-2003 08:21 PM).]

THE-1-U-DISLIKE
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4 posted 2003-11-18 07:03 PM


i wana say another word 4 S.R.A
i wana tell him that (I will never ever forget)

[This message has been edited by THE-1-U-DISLIKE (11-18-2003 07:08 PM).]

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