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LiL-Jew
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since 2003-10-28
Posts 30


0 posted 2003-11-12 06:53 PM



THE LIGHT
By: Olia Levin
11/12/03

Im sitting here thinking
As I look all around
Everyday normal people
But are they really found?

Everyday normal people
And everyday they usually talk
But how can a body be a live
If they don’t learn to walk?

I look at them all
And this is what I see
A cold and hardened world
Is right before me.

People sitting, talking
But not moving at all
They are safe in their little bubble
Because they don’t want to fall.

Pastor’s they are preaching
But there is no light at all
Thinking that they can have their way
But they already did fall.

That safe and cozy bubble
It has been already popped
So why are you seeking a hiding place
When this sin should be stopped.

Why are you walking away?
When the world is seeking a light
Why don’t you get right out there?
And shine your light so bright.

Go up the hill and hit the city
That lies in evils eyes
Put on that armor given by God
Get rid of evils nasty spies.

Get out and bring the love of God
That you were once taught
For you are the light of this world
That light that even you have forgot.

tell me what you think, it just kinda came up in my head right now.

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dertah
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since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

1 posted 2003-11-12 10:56 PM


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Olive_8
Junior Member
since 2003-09-20
Posts 41
Canada
2 posted 2003-11-13 02:16 PM


Amazing, it spoke to me as a christian, and it made me realize that I am not doing all that i should be doing, so thanks!

~*~You can see it or you can dream it, that's your call~*~

-Doc Walker

greco
Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 85
buffalo ny
3 posted 2003-11-13 05:49 PM


i thought the idea behind it was a good one
not a bad write!!!

young_blood
Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
4 posted 2003-11-13 09:55 PM


i really liked the idea, it seemed forced out though, some of the lines didnt make sense. try to let it flow, it it doesnt flow out of you, take a break and come back to it-alex

now im alone, but not lonely like before

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